Today I made some major revisions to my Twitterive.  I realized after my conference with the professor that it needed a lot of work.  My place was still unclear and much of the story was was being told, rather than shown.  The majority of my Twitterive was just journal entries, which did not really flow well together.  Therefore, I decided to add some narrative with dialogue and description to make my story more interesting.  I also added some aspects which show the contrast of my life at Rowan to my life at home, including a to-do list for both places.   I also added a poem about the stress of college.  Also, in my original Twitterive, I focused on my relationship with Sarah a bit too much.  I realized that it wasn't exactly relevant to my story to include so much information about our relationship.  Now she is still a character in my story, but there is less information about our past.  I think my Twitterive now clearly demonstrates my disconnect to my place: Rowan.  I tried to better convey the stress I feel on campus.  I contrast this to the comfort and relief I feel at my home.  Overall, I'm very happy with the changes I made.  

    Discussing my Twitterive with some peers proved to be a productive experience.  Through a suggestion from a classmate, my ideas ended up going in a slightly different direction than I originally planned.  As of right now, the characters in my Twitterive include me, my best friend, Sarah, and possibly my family.  While I feel a connection to Rowan, I feel a disconnect to my home.  Sarah's connection to the piece is my best friend, and someone that reminds me of home, as I have grown up with her since fourth grade.  This story takes place in present- day, with possible flashbacks to previous times in my life.  The story will take place all around campus at Rowan.  This story takes place because it is what I'm feeling right now.  While enjoying life on campus I go to Sarah for comfort and for the reminder of home, which I often miss.  The story will take place through a narrative and through pictures.  My project is still in the early stages, so the direction of the piece may continue to transform and become more focused. 

The found poem below was composed from a series of my own tweets.

I miss home
I pray for a snow day
To be with my family by the fire
Instead I’m in the cold library
Eating a cold pretzel and drinking starbucks
With little motivation and so much work
You never know what is enough until you know what is more than enough
Well I’ve had just about enough of winter

The tweets used to compose this poem are below:

home for the day watching some football by the fire with the family #twitterive
just waited 20 minutes for a cold pretzel and a drink at the starbucks at the new bookstore. ridiculous #twitterive
So much work to do, so little motivation. Praying for a snow day! #twitterive
ice cream during a snowstorm? sure makes perfect sense #twitterive
probably shouldn't have waited until the night before to write this paper. and why do they keep it so cold in the library?! #twitterive
making rainbow cupcakes! finished product to come #twitterive
didn't come out quite right but it still looks cool #twitterive
"You never know what is enough until you know what is more than enough." #twitterive
i miss this little boy <3 #twitterive http://twitpic.com/3y6l1s
more snow?! ugh i've had just about enough of winter. #twitterive