Today I made some major revisions to my Twitterive. I realized after my conference with the professor that it needed a lot of work. My place was still unclear and much of the story was was being told, rather than shown. The majority of my Twitterive was just journal entries, which did not really flow well together. Therefore, I decided to add some narrative with dialogue and description to make my story more interesting. I also added some aspects which show the contrast of my life at Rowan to my life at home, including a to-do list for both places. I also added a poem about the stress of college. Also, in my original Twitterive, I focused on my relationship with Sarah a bit too much. I realized that it wasn't exactly relevant to my story to include so much information about our relationship. Now she is still a character in my story, but there is less information about our past. I think my Twitterive now clearly demonstrates my disconnect to my place: Rowan. I tried to better convey the stress I feel on campus. I contrast this to the comfort and relief I feel at my home. Overall, I'm very happy with the changes I made.